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    Mrs. Cynthia Young
   
Excellent use of voice
Our spot was right in the front and dead center on a little hill, elevated just high enough to see over the jumping crowd. Snaggling and defending that perfect spot took more courage than I knew I had. Sadie

Kids were swimming in their pools, splashing around in the water, laughing and playing with their friends or going to the park. The birds were chirping, and kids were riding their bikes, skateboards, and skates down my street. But me? i was looking out my window watching it all happen with nothing to do but stare. Kundanika

I thought to myself as I lifted my head to see what on God's green earth could possibly be the commotion. Michelle

It was scary because my mom was driving and she didn't have a sense of direction if a compass hit her in the nose. Alyson
Some oldies music played in the background, but it didn't sound too good to me. Page

Great use of humor
"Yes!" Yelped my brother Zachary as he jumped up and smacked his head on the luggage compartment above his head. Nicholas

At the end of the day Abby took us home, and I was tired but happy. That was the end of a great day. Of course Abby still owes me $250.00 for babysitting Lauren in the summer. Ambar
Great sensory details
The rain came down in a steady drizzle all that gray July day. The rain trickled down the foggy window panes, dripped from the roof, and settled into the shallow, muddy puddles all around the porch. I watched its steady drip and waited patiently by the phone. I'd stare at it, trying to make it ring, but the only sound I heard was the quiet pitter patter of the rain. DaRaeshae

As we rested, Haily, Sam, Hopie and I watched a couple of chipmunks chase each other around a nearby tree. I watched the golden sun filter through the tagle of pines and cedar. Laura

When I went in to audition, I was positive that everyone around me could hear the great thumping noise coming from within my chest. My hands were shaking vigorously and I have no control over them. Grant

The sun was at the top of the bright blue sky. Roman

My adrenaline is pumping powerfully through my body as the balls were flying everywhere. All I could hear is them whizing past my head and my body. CO2 and paint filled your nostrils as the paintballs explode on you. When you shoot your gun. CO2 smoke pours out of the barrel in a white puff of smoke. Dirt and paint touch your tongue when the dirty balls splatter all over you and people around you. Trent

Soon dad and I were crusin' down the road with the wind in my hair and a tank full of gas. Shelby

I woke up suddenly to the sound of my four year old brother and two year old sister playing in the bathtub.
I already had a sunburn. I had to wear a black hat and with that I was wearing brown shorts and a blue shirt and white and black tennis shoes. The sun was out, shining right in my face. Hailey

When we were walking we smelled some fish, people bar-b-quing and the lake water. Celeste

The sights that I saw was the amazing black and white ball flying up in the air. The sounds of the shrieking crowd was all I heard when my team scored on the other team. The incredible smell was just chopped up grass. The taste was like wilt. The texture was the torrid sun mking my face all sweaty. Juan
Details and elaboration
I scored twice, and when you score they announce you name on the speaker. Ben

We had tuna with crackers, but the pigeons seemed to enjoy the creackers more than we did. We broke off small pieces and threw them on the ground so they could eat them. My dad even placed pieces on his shoe and the birds would eventually eat them. Amy

My dad's family lives in Zacatecas, Mexico and my mom's family lives there,too. Ana

So on the night we had to leave we decided to shoot fireworks. While they were doing that I went into the basement and brought back a lego cowboy. Weh I came outside I strapped a little piece of fireworks that looked by dynamite to the cowboy. Then Peter lit it and now it was raining legos.Zachary

They took many pictures of the fish from different angles and set it free. The keeper range is 3ft-7ft, so they could not keep it. Brandon

Then the lady from the cash registar said, "forty nine-ninty five." My brother looked at me like "Wow, we barely had enough."
Edwin

I grabbed a shopping cart and began looking for the things I would need to supply my little crab. A hermit crab definitely needs a home such as a cage. The cage that I choose for my new little friend was a small one with a black lid. Purple sand will be perfect for the crab to stroll on each day. A hermit crab needs a sponge, so that they are able to drink. See, a hermit crab drinks water by sucking it from the sponge. In addition, a crab needs two little dishes; one so that my crab can swim in one and the other one so that he can eat out of. Mackenzie

There was water that flowed down the mountain and into a wishing pond. When you touched the water you have to pull your hand back or it will burn off. Salvador

I got a Honda XR 200 racing dirtbike. It's really fast. It's really nice I always clean it when I get through riding it so I won't mess it up or anything. I put new parts on it when I need them. Garrett

Have you ever had a feeling like you have never had before like you've had the most fun thing in the world or you feel so proud of yourself for accomplishing something or even looking at someone and say, whow, I want to be like that guy". Well that is how I feel when I skate. There is a thrill in skating that I can not put into words. While I skate it's like I'm in my own world and when I land a hard trick I think of all the times I had fallen on it and whe I lad it, it feels like I had just made a 100 on a test or you have just gone sky diving. Bryndin
Descriptive details and action verbs
At around 5:00pm on a muggy day in June we demolished the orange and black Gladewater team 10-0. The next day we played the talented unit from Kilgore putting them down as we moved onto play the hot Hallsville team. They were no match for us as we defeated them under the lights in our blue jerseys. With this victory we clinched a spot in state and we were also the only undefeated team in the district tournament. Brett

When we got out of the store, we realized that rain clouds had loaded the once blue sky. We zoomed back to the cabins. Dad quickly went around to the back of the cabin to start the fire. It had already started pouring rain. Dad kept the fire going under the very little shade the roof gave off. Corina

Excitedly I took a shower and put on my white miniskirt and my pink HOLLISTER shirt. Quickly I straightened my hair, put on my jewelry, and squirted perfume(Ralph Lauren). My mommy arrived home from work and got all prettied up like me. Kennedy
Excellent opening ideas
I was born in Guatemala, and I lived in Guatemala for ten years. I came in 2005 to the US.
Rony

"Ready," called Nina from the navigator's chair. She must have really believed we would crash, because she was wearing a helmet, an oxygen mask, and a parachute made of Wal-Mart sacks. Peyton

"The water is freezing!" shrieked Lucas, my younger brother as he splashed around in the snow-fed river. I looked up from my book to see a powerful river, the blue, cloudless sky overhead, casing shadows to make the watercourse appear green. Rebecca

During the summer, I auditioned for a musical called Aladdin Junior at Artsview Children's Theatre near an old Baptist church downtown. Ever since I was three or four years old, I've loved to dance and sing. Grant

As the playoff come to a close, I begin what might be my greates baseball journey of all time. It was also one of the hairiest. John

D.Q Scott? What a guy! Now when you think of this name do you see a strong young man determined to play? No! D.Q. Scott sounds like some nerd who likes to eat at Dairy Queen. D.Q.

I could only see the ceiling above me that the flashlight dimly illuminated. Sitting in the closet with me was my sister, Delaney, and my grandmother. Outside it was raining vigorously and the only thing I could hear was the pounding water, the whistling of the wind, and the occasional snap of breaking limbs. Only hours ago had everything been fine, as we watched the news in the den, but then, the rain began. Christina
Excellent use of transitional phrases
Another day passed, and we were finally in Wyoming. Emily
Excellent use of Magic 3
My family had packed the day before, so we hopped into the care and started the journey to Wyoming. Emily

The day was full of good friends, good food, and good times. Brianna
Similes
My hair looked like the bride of Frankeninstein before I brushed it.
I packed my p.j.s, a pillow, my soft white flowered blanket that feels like a cloud, my stuffed animal, material to make patches with clothes, and my cell phone. Angela

The kittens are are adventourous as old Greek heros in greek mythology. Mallory

I looked at my sister. Her face was more white than a sheep's coat, but for some reason my dad was laughing? Michelle

As my cabinmates pulled me up my stomach churned like homemade ice-cream. Madison
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